3,2,1.....buzzer goes off

This is the last week for my research paper to get done and it's time to get ballin'. The clock is running down and much work is left to do. Before I write about my goals for this week I will give you a little preview of what I got done last week. I was able to get a lot more sources and some great information to help me get my paper done. I finished my intro paragraph and I'm almost done with some paragraphs. It's been pretty difficult finding stuff on how Disney and Grimm's stories affected their time era but I feel like its going to end up well. Here is a look at my first body paragraph. "Two of the most influential fairy tale tellers in history were the Grimm brothers, Jacob and Wilhelm. They preserved many of the original oral-tradition fairy tales into written form. The Grimm fairy tales are probably the most accurate versions of these tales in existence today. Corruption, sleaze, and gore, festers within every version of the Grimm’s fairy tales. But, as social attitudes change, so do the fairy tales. Stories of magic, love, and wishes coming true are the whimsical tales Disney has recreated. By comparing and contrasting the Brothers Grimm and Disney’s version of Snow White, it is clear that Disney commercialized the originally dark tale. Disney has been praised for his masterpieces, but one cannot forget where they originated." I'm looking for some feed back on this paragraph. I want my viewers to respond to my writing. Tell me what you think. Do you like my ideas? How is it coming so far? What should I add or take away? Now to get back to my first sentence of this blog. My goal is very obvious this week, I must get my paper done. Its due in a few days and time is flying by. Its also not going to be easy to get this done because I have baseball games Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday and Friday this week. This leaves very little time for homework but thats life. Speaking of life, if you want to get a reality check on life check out Marini's blog. Kid is down to earth and speaks da truth. His opinion may hurt your feelings, but at-least he tells it like it is.